Fanfic(my 1st) Tit-antic...

Okay, here it is my first fanfic...I EXPECT it to be poor, feel free to criticise it in any way (good or bad!, because it all helps!) this will help me decide to finish it or not...blah, blah, legal crap, blah, blah...Hope it's worth finishing (did it in word so I probably will anyway)-this should be being crossposted to alt.tv.sp.creative too, but am unsure!.....here goes...

PROJECT "Tit-antic"

[Scene: the boyz are sittin' on cartman's sofa watching Titanic]

Cartman: that sucked ass!

Stan: yeah, but dude, that woman had massive breasts (or tits, whatever fits)

Kenny: mplh mnlphlph (yeah, but so has Cartman!)

[Boys laugh in unison]

Cartman: Ay! * Beep * off you hippie bastards, go home and protest against your hippie rights crap!

Kyle: Dude! Calm.

[They go outside...as they're leaving...]

Cartman's mom: Eric honey�

Cartman: ER...yes mom?

Cartman's mom: don't forget your beanie * hat *

[Kenny bursts out, Kyle + Stan join in the laughter]

Stan: yeah, Cartman don't forget your nappies neither.

[Boys continue their giggling as they leave Cartman's house... New scene: bus stop, waiting to go to school (rather obviously)]

Kenny: mlpphmlnphnnlp-mnhlph (?)

Cartman: shut up Kenny, or I'll whoop your ass!

Kenny: mlkhplmhasslppkmhn (?)

Cartman: Ay! That does it, come 'ere

[Chases Kenny into the [address] ploughs through the snow and fog can see the basic outline and vivid headlights...Kenny heads straight at [address] follows-tense scene ensues (in slo-mo)]

Kenny: mlhh...hlmmmpaash... Bleugghh (arrgghh! Fuck, damn you Cartman {in slo-mo} you fat assed gimboid)

Cartman: Hurry...up Kenny...you're gonna...be dead meat {in slo-mo}

Kyle: Dude, surreal!

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In article , thallium_fishpie wrote:

Cartman: No, wait, that DIDN'T suck ass, it was sweeeet!

Keep it going!

Waiting for more...

^,,^ meow meow d'kiten ...who once had a Kenny that she needed killed...

That's cool dude.. keep it going..

That's cool dude..

Typically, you want to make your 'fics longer, but this one was okay, from what I've read :) . Cartman wouldn't show that much concern for Kenny though...

the_"back after a sabbatical" davester

In article , thallium_fishpie wrote:

I like it! Keep it coming. I've got to agree with Davester's comments on Cartman, though.

CF

the_davester wrote:

the_davester writes this bit...which should follow...

yeah, i thought it would be longer than that because it took up a page in word(?) and the point of cartman was misinterprited-he wasn't saying how he cared if Keeny died but that HE was threatening to kill Kenny himself; demonstrate... Cartman: Hurry�up Kenny�you're gonna�be dead meat {in slo-mo} saying :^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ or I'll get you

be dead meat bit^^^^^^^^^^^^...I'm gonna kick your arse....

Anyway...I've got part 2 up now(both ngs) and am working on the 3rd part...the length of this story means that unless everyone wants to read a really long final part...I'll split it up

<snipped own fanfic>
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