That fic you just posted KICKS ASS!!!! I think it's the way you write Cartman's lines that makes it funny (nyah, hyah, thya, ah, etc) and I can really hear him saying it. That's probably the first time I was on the floor laughing at a fanfic. Top class. The punctuation also helps a lot too, I could really feel the characters saying and doing these things.
Many thanks to you, Tags! I'm glad that I've been able to paint such an accurate picture of what's going on for you. That's something I've been trying to do since I set out writing SP fanfics. To those of you who find my fics hard to read, I'd suggest try reading Mark Twain sometime. Sometimes, writing in vernacular is just as hard (or harder) as reading it.
Mr. Dead
"Mr. Dead: Making the world safer for those who aren't living!"
I remember, in junior high school, we had to read Mark Twain. I couldn't understand a thing that was being said, and even trying to make sense of it gave me headaches. IMHO, it's best to use clear speech, when writing, and leave the vernacular to the spoken word.
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Mark Twain is as easy to read as Dr.souses compared to Shakespeare. I can only read Shakespeare for ten minutes at a time. and even then I have to read the same part 5 or 6 times just to understand it.
JB "You know, there are many people in the country today who, through no fault of their own, are sane... It is up to people like you and me who are out of our tiny little minds to try and help these people overcome their sanity.'"- Rev. Arthur Belling
20000 Leagues Under the Sea... I tried to read that once and SLOGGED through it:
He looked up at the portholes, and found them to be of a strange variety. While the glass itself seemed to have come from Africa (due to erroneous abraisions in the molecular cohesion of the glass), the lining of the portholes was obviously the dead flesh of the Giveitarest boringfrenchusdude variety of skeletonless fish. He smiled, because he had succesfully wasted yet another paragraph to show how intelligent the author was.
I know it's translated from french, but BLECCHHH!!! :P
the_davester http://www.geocities.com/~dgisoft/nirvana/ "May the Horse be with you, but beware the Dark Side of the Horse. He tends to pee on himself." --Bad Star Wars pun
Yeah but at least everything is spelled right. Try Chaucer sometime.
"Ande sune dydde the Wyfe of Bathe Did Sucke uponne the Myllre's Dikke, And eeke the Myllre dydde mone..."
JB "You know, there are many people in the country today who, through no fault of their own, are sane... It is up to people like you and me who are out of our tiny little minds to try and help these people overcome their sanity.'"- Rev. Arthur Belling
Here's the Independence Day speech you wanted: ( word for word )
President Geez- Good morning. <radio static> Good morning. In less than an hour, aircraft from here will join others from around the world and you will be launching the largest aerial battle in the history of mankind. <long pause> Mankind, that <pause> word should have new meaning for all of us today. We can't be consumed by our petty differences anymore... we will be united in our common interest. <pause> Perhaps it's fate that today is the fourth of July, and you will once again be fighting for our freedom, not from tyranny, opression or persecution... but from annihilation. We're fighting for our right to live... to exist. <pause> And should we win the day, the fourth of July will no longer be known as an American holiday, but as the day when the world declared as one voice: "We will not go quietly into the night. We will not vanish without a fight. We're going to live on. We're going to survive." Today we celebrate our Independence Day!