New fan fic!

This is my first fic on Deja.com. Send all comments,criticisim[is that spelt right?], and questions to [email].

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The odd fanfic.

(Kenny,Lenni,Kyle,and Ashley are in a field.)

Kenny:Where are we? Lenni:Don't know. Kyle:Damnit! Ashley pulls an MP5 from her pocket and loads it. (gun cocking.) Ashley:OK,I'm ready for anything.

A large number of dancing potatoes waltz by.

Lenni:What the fucking hell was THAT?! Kenny feels a sharp pain in his back and groans in pain. Lenni runs to Kenny. Lenni:What happened? Kenny:ooog, be-behind you Lenni turns around to see just two football shaped eyes. Glowing red.Blood red. Lenni whips the confetti gun out of her pocket and fires at both eyes exploding them both. Kenny is bleeding from the back...badley

Kenny:(groan.)(weakly.)help me. Lenni is putting bandages on Kenny's back. Lenni:Ya OK? Kenny nods. Lenni:Good. Lenni hugs Kenny. A spicey potato jumps out of nowhere and in to Kyle's mouth, turning him in to a Caterpie from Pokemon. Ashley:Kyle?Where are you? (Ashley sees Kyle is a Pokemon.) Kyle:(to Ashley.)Don't ask.

later that day...

Kenny,Lenni,Ashley, and Kyle are looking for other people. Kenny:I don't think anyone else is here. Suddenly a massive fireball lands on all four scamps. Then Kenny woke up. Kenny:I had the weirdest fucking dream... In the background a Caterpie with Kyles hat on is walking down the street.

The end...Or is it?

i hope you can do better than that

AdidasBas3 skrev i meddelelsen ... :i hope you can do better than that

My... my... that's really constructive criticism!

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