FANFIC: "The Cartman curse" Part 1

Oct 4, 19986 posts by 5 posters
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Tom Arthur

This is my first ever fanfic, and as ever, all crits/messages of encouragement are welcomed wholeheartedly.

The Cartman Curse

[Insert regular legal crap here]

[The boys are, as ever standing at the bus stop, and Cartman's cat is sitting with them]

Kyle: Cartman, your goddamn cat has followed us to the bus stop again!

Cartman: Well done Kyle, good to see your Jewishness doesn't affect your obvious intelligence.

Kenny: {Isn't that your mom's pussy Cartman? Everyone in town's seen that}

Kyle: Sick dude!

Cartman: Ay! Shut the hell up Kenny, go buy some new thread to mend your scraggy clothes!

[Kenny hits Cartman]

Stan: Go for it, hit the fatass!

[Suddenly, kitty jumps on Kenny]

Kenny: {Aaaaggghhh! Get your cat the fuck off me!}

Cartman: I don't want to. (in a matter-of-fact tone)

Stan: call your cat off Cartman!

Kyle: Yeah!

Cartman: Ok, ok, leave the very poor child alone kitty.

[Kitty dismounts Kenny, and sits there, as if nothing has happened]

Stan: What the hell was that all about Cartman?

Cartman: My mom sent Kitty to this special school for animals, where they learn to fight and protect their owners. It wouldn't do for your dog though Stan, 'cause he's a gay homosexual, and he wears leather pants.

Stan: Shut up Fatass!

[Bus draws up, door opens]

Ms. Crabtree: Get on boys!

Kenny: {Fuck off and die bitch, and go suck an elephant's dick}

Ms. Crabtree: What did you say?

Kyle: Erm� Nobody ever knows, we usually have to guess.

Ms. Crabtree: Oh, ok.

[Boys get on, and bus leaves for school]

[In class, Mr Garrison is introducing an oriental-looking person in white judo thing and black belt]

Mr Garrison: Now children, this is Hai San Wan, from the martial arts training college in Middle Park.

Hai San Wan: Challo Shildren. Kyle: Is this guy for real?

Mr Garrison: Hai san is going to teach us the ancient martial art of Judo.

Cartman: My mom says that oriental people eat rice and that's why they're poor and live in really small houses.

Kenny: {Your mom is fucked up}

Cartman: Ay!

Hai San: I need a volunteer.

Stan: Fatass'll have a go.

Cartman: I'm not fat, my clothes weigh more than I do, I have to wear many layers because I am allergic to the cold.

Kyle: Shut up dude.

Hai San: Ah, so you there with the blue hat, you want have go?

Cartman: No way!

Hai San: Good, good

[Walks over to cartman, grips him by the neck and throws him over his head]

Cartman: Ay!!!! You son-of-a-bitch!

Mr Garrison: Now Eric, do you want me to send you to Principal victoria?

Cartman: no sir.

Mr Garrison: well take your beating like a man then.

[Cartman uppercuts Hai San in the nuts]

Hai San: You are most dishonoulable fighter.

Cartman: cool.

Hai san: I put an ancient curse on your whole family.

Cartman: Ay! Take that back!

Stan: ha ha, Cartman's cursed, Cartman's cursed!!

[Cut to cafeteria]

Chef: Hey my little bundles of white trash, how you doin' today?

Cartman: bad.

Chef: Why bad?

Kyle: cartman got a curse put upon him by that visiting judo dude.

Kenny: {Cartman fought like a pussy}

Cartman: Ay!

Chef: now that's not very nice young Kenny.

Stan: What's for dinner today chef?

Chef: No dinner today children, I had to stay in bed this morning with a beautiful lady friend of mine.

[Chef waves at Principal Victoria as she goes past]

Cartman: Goddammit, no dinner, ah shit!

End of part 1

Hoped you liked it, please give me feedback! Regards

Tom Arthur

"I kicked him square in the nuts, and he cried like Nancy Kerrigan." - Cartman

well... There were some classic parts (Cartman allergic to the cold) but otherwise focus more on Plot than so many Jokes not that I don't like Jokes but all in all it was Pretty Good. B +

In article , Ds2587sp writes

Erm... I don't think that you can criticize his 'fics, and you certainly can't grade them. Your fanfics have awful spelling, and for that I would give you a D- mister. South Park has jokes in it, and I think that you should lighten up on the plot. Joe Turner

dude lighten up. Now I am spell checking and I also should have the right to my opinion. So do you. That is why I am not cursing the hell out of you>>

P S: Whats wrong with a B+ I would be honered to get a B +

-Dan

In article ,

Loved that part. Nice 'fic.

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In article , Tom Arthur wrote:

Cool. I eagerly await part 2.

Martin "Do you really think the Tooth Fairy will believe your mouth had 300 teeth in it?" --Hobbes