mock seinfeld episode i.e. fanfic

hello- I have written my own seinfeld script and would love to get some feedback on it from true seinfeld fans.

The episode "The Taxibomber" is a takeoff of the Unabomber incident. In brief, the plot is this- Kramer gets into a taxi and hears the taxidriver mumble something to the extent of "We're going to bomb your building." Kramer gets freaked out and tries to protect the building. In the meantime, Jerry ponders dumping his date because she won't crumble crackers in her soup. When he sneaks in a few crackers, she thinks he is poisoning her. The plots intertwine and Jerry is put on trial as "The Taxibomber" with Jackie Chiles as his attorney.

I incorporated a lot of minutia from previous episodes that Seinfeld fans will appreciate.

If anyone wants to read it, it can be found at members.aol.com/msimon6986/seinfeld.html

Read the script. It sucks. Stick to broadcasting, kid. Even if it is for those blasted Mercer Mauraders.

Just keep away from the steel wool.

OK. I gave it a second chance. Here's my take:

Your script is unconscious. No, wait: Unconscious isn't the word.

in spite of what that person said, I would still encourage any fan of the show to check this out and let me know what they think. All constructive criticism is welcome. I'd prefer something better then "It sucks!"

Thanks. Mark

If you're trying to get a laugh from the Unabomber, you're fucked up beyond any psychotherapy, kiddo.

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