Create Your Own Seinf

Apr 18, 1994, 6:40 PM ET10 posts by 6 posters
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Michael Motoda

AL>I'd give it an A-. Although it is a little short, it is in the fine traditio AL>the way many of the shows start out, and has the enormous potential of turni AL>into an entire episode in true Seinfeldian fashion! BTW your speeling ain't AL>bad.

I'm getting a little used to TFOM (if that's what you're referring to, and I assume right now that it is)... you're right about it falling a big short, but then again, Seinfeld is already in it's fourth season, and the early episodes weren't seen as that great, either. I love them now, which is biased since I love the show no matter what, but TFOM, once the characters become more accustomed to each other and being in front of the camera, it does have the potential to become great.

On a similar note, I'm starting to watch reruns of The Gary Shandling Show on Saturday nights... not sure if it's on at any other time, but I think this was one of those shows that was a precursor to Seinfeld. Not that they are the same type of show, but the originality factor shown in TGSS was fabulous, which is Seinfeld's claim to fame as well. Their spoofs on such films as The Natural and The Graduate are hilarious, and they always do off-the-wall things and have jokes that are perfectly timed. And who can forget those souped-up custom golfcarts that they drive around the studio with? Those are great. One of my favorite segments from that show is the one where Gary is going to raise Sea Monkeys, he pours the package into the water, and then he pulls out the mixing spoon and gives this LOOK to the camera which is totally classic.

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Michael MotodaMichael Motoda

-> I once tried to create a Seinfeld-crossed-with-Goodfellas parody call -> "Seinfellas." I never was able to get the dialogue right.

Well, one thing's for sure... the dialogue would sound like the Frozen Yogurt episode... well, the bleeps of course. :^)

Christopher HannaMichael Motoda

I am taking a visual media class, and the prof. gave us an assignment to draw up something visual of an event that happened in my life...he suggested a commercial, photo-essay, sit-com, etc.

I asked him if I could take the event/concept and switch the characters to fit a Seinfeld dialog. He agreed, so now I have to think of something irrelevant in my life that the Seinfeld crew would go crazy over.

Christopher Hanna Virginia Tech [email]
ThwartedEffortsChristopher Hanna

That's easy... pick anything that happens to you, use that. Find one of your friends who notice *everything* and another on who complains about everything else, add a little water, and stir. Blend for about 10 minutes, write down the dialog, turn it in. A+ paper.

Andy

Tharrow PeguesChristopher Hanna

The Fifty

Jerry : Hey, are those new shoes? Elaine: Yeah, why do you ask? Jerry : I can't believe you went out and bought new shoes... Elaine: What am I supposed to do walk around shoeless? Jerry : You don't have a clue do you? Elaine: I bought a new pair of shoes. What's the big deal? Elaine: Since when was buying a new pair of shoes a crime? Jerry : You honestly don't know do you? Elaine: Know what? Jerry : When I asked you for the fifty you owed me, that I owed Kramer, that he owed George, that he owed his girl friend. You said you didn't have it. Elaine: I didn't have it then but I do know. Jerry : How much? Elaine: How Much? Jerry : Yes, how much did you pay for the shoes? Elaine: If you must know Jerry, one fifty, all right, one fifty! Jerry : You can pay one fifty for a pair of shoes but you can't pay me. Jerry : Isn't our friendship worth more than a pair of womens shoes? Elaine: Ok, ok. Here's your fifty. (Smacks the fifty in Jerry's hand) Elaine: Are you happy now? You've got your money. Jerry : Thank you, Elaine. {Smiling}

{ All of a sudden the door opens and in jumps Kramer } { Jerry is standing there with the fifty in his hand. }

Kramer: What's that? {Pointing to the fifty in Jerry's hand.} Jerry : It's a fifty. Kramer: Whoooa, I don't believe this? Jerry : What? What? You don't believe what? Kramer: Earlier when I asked you for the fifty that you owed me, that I owed George, that George owed his girl friend. You said you were broke. Jerry : I just got this fifty from Elaine. Kramer: Sure, Jerry, Sure. Kramer: Come on man do you think I'm blind? (Grabbing his hair a spinning in a circle) Kramer: She's wearing new shoes for crying outloud! No way she could have given you a fifty! Elaine: Enough with the shoes already, I'm taking them back. I didn't like them that much anyway.

{ Elaine takes her old shoes out of the box puts them on and puts the new shoes back in the box and leaves the apartment in a rage.}

Jerry : Here take the fifty. { Smacks the fifty in Kramer's hand } {George and his girl friend enter the open door.}

Kramer: Her ya go big fella.

{Whispers in George's ear as he slides the fifty in George's sweater pocket and leaves the apartment.}

George : "Jerry, Cindy" "Cindy, Jerry" {introducing Jerry to his girl} George : We passed Elaine on the way up. She was saying something about shoes? Jerry : Oh yeah, she bought some new shoes today. George : New shoes? Jerry : Yep, new shoes. Gotta have'em. Can't walk without'em.

{ As George and his girl friend head toward the sofa, she notices something hanging from his sweater pocket. The fifty is showing through a hole in his pocket. }

Cindy : What's that? {Pointing to the fifty dangling from his pocket now.} George: What's what? {Looking bewildered.} Cindy : That! Cindy : What's that? {Snatching the fifty from the hole in his pocket.} George: Oooh, that. George: That's the fifty Kramer gave me. I must have forgotten about it. Cindy : You said you didn't have any money, liar! George: I didn't at first but now I do. Help me out here Jerry. Jerry : Yeah, Elaine paid me, I paid Kramer and he paid George so he could pay you.

{Cindy jumps off the sofa, slaps George and stomps Jerry's toe as she heads toward the door turning to say.}

Cindy : You two expect me to believe that bunch of baloney. She just bought a new pair of shoes! George: Of all the stories you could tell her you had to go and tell the truth. Thanks a lot Jerry. {Running after Cindy.} Jerry : What did I do? {Throwing up his hands.}

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ThwartedEffortsTharrow Pegues

Truely great... only one prob. Kramer wouldn't spin around when he said blind. It would be more like him to bug his eyes out or point to his eyes dramaticly. I give it an A+!

Christopher KankelThwartedEfforts

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Writing in Kramer's antics is impossible. The best you can hope to do is suggest what might seem funny. Why? Because if not mistaken he is improvising most of the time. When he thinks its time to be wild or goofy he does so. This lends an easily recognizable spontanaiety to the role.

Writing it in seems stale and contrived. It certainly goes to show that the guy portraying Kramer(what is his name) has some real talent.

If I'm mistaken, flame away boys...

Tharrow PeguesThwartedEfforts

Truely great... only one prob. Kramer wouldn't spin around when he said blind. It would be more like him to bug his eyes out or point to his eyes dramaticly. I give it an A+!

Thanks...

Roy EassaMichael Motoda

[email] (Michael Motoda) writes:

It was called, "It's Garry Shandling's Show", I think. And it was quite inventive. As I recall, its run overlapped that of Seinfeld, and when the latter was new many people noted the parallels.

Michael MotodaMichael Motoda

TP> The Fifty

This definitely has the potential to be a good time waster in the show. I like the idea, but some of the dialogue didn't sound like the characters they were supposed to be spoken by. Some minor things - not necessarily right, but what I feel they might do or say instead:

TP>Elaine: Yeah, why do you ask?

She'd probably just do a quick, "Yeah, why?" or she might suddenly get offended because of last season when she bought the Botticelli's and then bring up Jerry's ex-girlfriend Gale in this conversation.

TP>Elaine: If you must know Jerry, one fifty, all right, one fifty!

That's right on target.

TP>Kramer: Whoooa, I don't believe this?

"Whoooa, I'm surPRISED at you!"

TP>Kramer: Sure, Jerry, Sure.

He might instead opt to do his classic 'head-tilted-back-slightly-with- a-quick-couple-short-nods-of-the-head' type thing while doing a subtle, "Uh-huh". Sorta like how he was talking when he was accusing George of being "in love" with Tony, Elaine's extreme-sports boyfriend.

TP>George : "Jerry, Cindy" "Cindy, Jerry" {introducing Jerry to his girl}

"Marla, George" "George, Marla" "Jerry, Cindy" "Cindy, Jerry" :^)

TP>Cindy : What's that? {Pointing to the fifty dangling from his pocket now.} TP>George: What's what? {Looking bewildered.} TP>Cindy : That! TP>Cindy : What's that? {Snatching the fifty from the hole in his pocket.} TP>George: Oooh, that. TP>George: That's the fifty Kramer gave me. I must have forgotten about it. TP>Cindy : You said you didn't have any money, liar! TP>George: I didn't at first but now I do. Help me out here Jerry. TP>Jerry : Yeah, Elaine paid me, I paid Kramer and he paid George so he could TP>pay you.

I like that part. It has to happen to George, and that's exactly what you did. Good job. I have to commend you (and everyone else) on coming up with these dialogues. They're fun to read.

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